oooof this is so good. every line HIT holly, and the pace you set with your line breaks carries the cadence beautifully, like something flowing out of you almost unwillingly but cannot stop. atl that's how it felt to me. gorgeous <3
The voice in this poem feels relentless, almost claustrophobic, and that intensity never lets up. I especially liked the extended chess metaphor—it turns manipulation into something cold, calculated, and inescapable. Powerful piece.
oooof this is so good. every line HIT holly, and the pace you set with your line breaks carries the cadence beautifully, like something flowing out of you almost unwillingly but cannot stop. atl that's how it felt to me. gorgeous <3
Thank you so much Lia I appreciate the way you spend time reading and replying and really looking at peoples work it makes me feel seen
Absolutely love those last lines.
Love this, excellent work!
Thank you I appreciate it
Ufff. wickedly twisted just like i like em:
"I am your nicotine"
Thank you !
The voice in this poem feels relentless, almost claustrophobic, and that intensity never lets up. I especially liked the extended chess metaphor—it turns manipulation into something cold, calculated, and inescapable. Powerful piece.
Thank you Antonio! It’s one of my darker ones
That last stanza.... 🔥🔥🔥🔥
Thank you Nick!!
Wow. Powerful stuff. There's no messing with you.
I wrote it about a friends awful ex!
Must have been pretty awful!
Damn. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻